Muhabat laffz* nahi acha,
Chalo tabdeel krte hain...
Barra hi dard deta hai,
Boht azeeyat bhi hoti hai,
Kisi ko dil mein rakhne se,
Khalish kuch barrh si jaati hai,
Kisi ka hath jo thaama,
Vo pal mein chhoot sakta hai
Kisi ko apna jo jana,
Paraya pal mein hota hai...
Muhabat laffz* nahi acha,
Chalo tabdeel krte hain,
Iss jazbay ko ab se hum,
Chalo taqdeer kehte hain!
* laffz = word
Wah Wah Wah.. this is really nice ^ ^ love this one!
ReplyDeleteawww thank you! =)
ReplyDeletebohattttttt hi alaaaaa :)
ReplyDeleteah soo soo beautiful :-). Did you write it yourself?
ReplyDelete@ nadia: thank yew!
ReplyDelete@ raajii:
ReplyDeleteyes... back in 2007. found my old diary :)
wah wah wahhhhhhh ! MASHALLAH :)
ReplyDeleteirfan kazmi :)
very nice...but still mohabbat word will remain the same :)
ReplyDeletei loved most of ur writings...but i found dis one d best...mayb bcoz i can so identify wid it...lovely thoughts u have penned down...keep it up...
ReplyDeleteThank u so much for the kind words, lady :)
ReplyDeletenice thought but execution could have been better. the meter of CHALO TABDEEL KARTE HAIN is different from the meter of MUHABBAT LAFZ NAHIN ACHA. for example if the line was MUHABBAT LAFZ ACHA HAI and CHALO TABDEEL KARTE HAIN the meter would be balanced. in your case first line is hevier. line 3 and 4 have the same problem. next few lines are fine then in the last two lines, the first line needs balance. for example if you add AUR before ISS JAZBAT KO HUM it will be balanced. sorry, couldn't help being myself (a jerk).
ReplyDeleteMy AZAAD NAZMS have a lot of problem. Please forgive this amateur writer :)
ReplyDeleteI just wrote it for the heck of giving words to my feelings. Thank u for the comments and guidance. Much appreciated.